More Reviews, and a Fancy Map

Hello once again!

Just a quick update, this time. I didn’t get a whole lot of feedback on the map I was working on, but I decided to brush it up and push it out anyway, just as a placeholder until someone with a greater degree of cartographic skill can come along and tell me what I should have been doing or what I’m missing. I’ve got a topic going in the forum for anyone who wants to make comments, suggestions, criticisms, etc.

This Map is a cartographic Frankenstein's monster.

For those who are interested, the nifty coastline effect was achieved primarily through a method I learned about here, the mountains, trees, and waves came from here, the paper effect came from here, and the font comes from here. The compass rose in the corner is 100% me, though. Many thanks to the respective creators of the respective components for giving me the tools to make art despite a complete lack of artistic skill on my part.

While I’m handing out thanks, I would also like to thank The Akamai Reader for the recent reviews of the books of the trilogy. Head on over to check out her reviews of The Book of Deacon, The Great Convergence, and The Battle of Verril. I’m very pleased that my writing continues to catch the eye and earn the praise of book blogs all over the internet.

That’s all for today. Thanks, as always, for reading.


  1. I read the book of deacon recently and I generally it is a great start, although it can be improved dramatically. I would suggest working more on the reasons behind each character and their actions. Explaining the war and how did it begin in a clear way would be a good idea as well.
    The map needs some modifications as well to be a better illustration of the events. For example, the whole structure of the contenant is a bit weird. It’s almost a rectangelur with some curves. It lacks details, wich makes it look smaller. The trees’ size is too big comparing with the mountins’ size. I suggest making the most of the north empty and moving the forests to the southern part of the map because forests are rarely thick in a very cold weather.

    Thanks for a great book and I look forward to reading the the other parts.

    1. Hi, thanks for your thoughts! I absolutely agree that there is room for improvement in my writing. Some things, like the details of the start of the war, a laid out in later books, while motivations could certainly use work. With the book now in so many hands, I don’t intend to do any major rewrites, so hopefully I’ll be able to avoid the same shortcomings in future writings.

      As for the map? Well, I’m even more amateur as a geographer and cartographer than I am as a writer, so I knew better than to shoot for realism. I was more interested in creating a general guideline to help people picture things in their heads, so I went with the “there are trees in this general area, there are mountains in this general area, there is water in this general area” approach. Plus, as one of my friends is so eager to point out, if I tried to make it perfectly accurate, it would probably start to reveal some navigational inconsistencies in the writing. This, too, is something I hope to improve in the future.

      Thanks for writing!

  2. I have just finished reading the third and final Book of Deacon. It was a truly wonderful adventure. I was bittersweet to read final words. Mr. Lallo you are truly an amazing artist. I look forward to reading more of your fine work. Best of luck to you!

  3. Finished Jade last night. LOVED it. Seriously, I couldn’t stop smiling the entire time! (ok, some parts I did NOT smile and I did end up crying…) BUT it was such a heart-warming book full of love and compassion. I enjoyed every page. I really liked reading about TBOD characters and how you graphed them in. Oh gosh, I want to say so much more but don’t want to spoil any of it for anyone. so I think I’ll head over to the forums….

    THANK-YOU for day dreaming, and putting it onto paper- such a treat for the rest of us!

    1. Glad to hear it!. Jade was a weird book for me, because I had already written the trilogy, but I’d only released one book of it when I decided I needed to try something different. It is good to know I still ended up with something worthwhile.

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